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When My Sorrow Was Born by I.R. Adams

When My Sorrow Was Born

When My Sorrow Was Born
0.58 (2.3 | 11.5)

Have you ever been filled with sorrow so much that you have forgotten how to cry? She was betrayed by the one she loved most! She strove to please him and yet she was cast aside. She buried her ...
I.R. Adams

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rating 3/5genre Prose > Fiction
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Blurb

Have you ever been filled with sorrow so much that you have forgotten how to cry?

She was betrayed by the one she loved most! She strove to please him and yet she was cast aside.

She buried her own children and crushed sorrow beneath her feet.

But perhaps all that sorrow was just preparing her for happiness. For truly with hardship comes ease.


Review

REVIEW:



Narration (10/10):

the style of narration in this book is everything to write home about. It forms the heart and soul of what makes the book commendable. It is written in a very intimate insightful first persons POV that brings the feelings and thoughts and experiences of the characters to the forefront of the reading experience. It is written in a fluid soft form that flows with feelings as opposed to technical thinking as if the main character, Haneefah, sits before an attentive audience and in a dramatic pulling reverie, looks into the emptiness of the atmosphere and tells her story; clearly with simple relatable words and use of friendly literary devices like simile to bring the experiences and emotions to life in real-time with an air of tangibility.



It was as though for the past eight years someone had been digging a well inside of me, with the land in me hard and dry. Without any sign of water and then suddenly, the driller broke through a layer of stone covering water. The water gush out of my soul, down my face without control. Eight years of being fine, eight years of being okay and not mourning fell away and now the pain of my loss was crushing every bit of me.




The quote above is part of the story, exhibiting one of the sections in which simile was employed intelligently to express, not only a picture but also set mood and spur emotions. Like the one above, many literary devices were deployed expertly in strategic scenes to tell Haneefahs story the best way possible.



Mood(10/10):

There isnt a lot a lot of writers who has mastered the ability to grab a readers attention, alter his/her mood and hold it as he/she pleases. I.R. Adams has managed to accomplish this in this short story, taking her readers through series of sequential and harmonious emotions from the epigraph to the epilogue and every single word within; making it immensely difficult to drop the book unfinished.



The mood and emotions of the story was held realistically (as opposed to excessively dramatically) at sorrowful and hopeless on until the end of the story. In a way, it was like Buchi Emechetas Joy of Motherhood, but not as annoying. This one, by I.R. Adams told the story peacefully and nicely in such a way that did not annoy or lead to a feeling of dejection and hopelessness, instead it gave peace to the bereaved and battered with relatable instances and message of you are not alone. In a way, it inspires one in a dark place to realize that there might be light at the end of the tunnel, but . . . even if there isnt, youre not alone in this darkness.



Story/plot(7/10):

The story is not an unusual one, but like love stories, even though very familiar stories of such nature, it is not the type we grow tired of reading over and over again, because it is not an entertainment-focused story; it is rather like a letter, a message through which the writer seemed to connect the world through. It is like something that was written without a lot of thoughts but with a lot of emotions, as if, like Haneefah, the writer wrote and wrote passionately, putting down messages, communicating with the world for whoever cares to lend their attention.



Grammar(7/10):

The grammar and choice of words were simple and natural. The story was written with every day English, making it an easy read for any English reader.



While this is highly efficient, it seemed to have lost a certain quality associated with literary arts that differentiated it with a sweet spice from the words and grammatical structures we hear every day and get tired of. However, this accentuates the raw quality of the story that made it feel like one was listening to Haneefah, a middle aged accountant, tell her story.



Characters(6/10):

The Characters were as they could be for a story cut so short. For the reason of the style of telling of the story, the only characters we end up fully acquainting with were, Haneefah, the main character, her father the architect of the main characters predicament and Ayuub. The rest of the characters did not play a lot of roles as it was told, therefore they merely floated through the story barely making impact on the mind of the readers.



Chronological Sequence(5/10):

There is something terribly annoying about the chronological arrangement of events in the story. It made sense the way events were arranged and summarized because the story was told as if through the mind of average middle-aged accountant (not a writer) but this, is sure, to leave readers with deep dissatisfaction at the end of the story. Chronologically, this is really long story that covers a long period of someones history, ranging through about twenty years. And in this period was meant to contain the main ingredients of the story which would have tremendously improved the appreciation of the story if more time was taken to absorb readers into those moments that made Haneefahs story. It would have been nice to have journeyed and experienced her history with her, but instead we were merely told of these experiences.



It is kind of sad, really.



Dialogue(5/10):

The nature of the story did not allow for much dialogues. It was narration almost all through. For one who requires to get acquainted through dialogues, the story might fail you; otherwise you will have no problem enjoying the story. I, for one, picks good narration over dialogues, therefore reading the story was smooth,



Conclusion:



This story did not fail. It might have failed to satisfy in some areas, but this is understandable as soon as the reader understand and appreciate the ingenious method the writer employed. The writer used simple everyday conversational structure of language and tale-telling method to write it and for this fact she owns no one anyone apology and/or explanation.



Total rating: 7.3%



Reviewed by Benjamin Paul, reader and writer.


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2 review[s]

inksquisite
WMSWB is a book I came accross at first in a little community where we read and give feedback on each other's work. This book is simply exquisite. Looking back on it now, I realize it wasn't actually the best Nigerian book I've read (that award is still Benjamin Paul's Chasing Annabelle yet) but it should suffice to say it holds an award in my heart for being the first book to draw my tears. I think you will testify to same.
Monday, 15-Oct-2018
paul
Welcome. I do hope you enjoy the book as much as I did. Don't be afraid to grab your own copy. It is not to be regretted
Thursday, 23-Aug-2018